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Jul 28, 2004 11:52 # 24864

kaizley *** posts about...

Weapon of Choice

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No... no... I'm not going to shoot or stab, or hurt anyone in any violent fashion. I'm past all of that. Today was relatively uneventful, no complaints there... I mean usually an eventful day would mean something bad happening, but today was pretty fun filled and not horrible, besides a few tears here and there (not from my eyes, or anything that was inflicted by me). I used a few of my creative juices, instead of doing some much needed studying for my yearlies in two weeks.

Rain poured down on the empty street
The grey skies letting go
Rain beating to a steady beat,
The gutters start to flow

No life appears behind closed doors
The town is silent, dead
Windows dull in all the stores
In streets where no one treads

A figure moves from in the dark
Slowly slipping away
Hides beneath his cardboard arch
And begs his soul to stay

The rain burns his dirt stained skin
But leave his bones to dry
Suffering ends within a sin
Left out there to die

*cough* not my best... but it's what I do in public, for other people..

and too afraid, you're too afraid to fall for anything. and too afraid, much too afraid to sing.

Jul 28, 2004 13:19 # 24872

majic *** throws in his two cents...

Re: Weapon of Choice

(rated excellent) I really like this Kaizley. It's perfect. The story it paints is very very good! I happen to be a fan of poems that have 4 line stanza's and are 4 stanza's in length.

Jul 30, 2004 03:51 # 24921

Bunk *** throws in his two cents...

Re: Weapon of Choice

I agree with majic, this is excellent, and the four line stanza (it has a name!) is my favorite format for poetry.

The subject/title Weapon of Choice... why that name? Are you familiar with the Fatboy Slim song of that name? (the one with the video where Christopher Walken goes flying around in a suit and tie..)

"History is more or less bunk." - Henry Ford

This post was edited by Bunk on Jul 30, 2004.

Jul 30, 2004 07:05 # 24924

kaizley *** replies...

Re: Weapon of Choice

Yeah. The name is from the song.. It's not really related to the poem... It was just what i was listening to at the time. Irrelevent really

and too afraid, you're too afraid to fall for anything. and too afraid, much too afraid to sing.


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